Haiku Koo-Koo 6/9/10


















Foggy morning pond
A duck’s quack does not echo
Yet travels miles


Wet steaming nostrils
Wooly head dusted with snow
Bison in winter

Roaming rolling bulk
Gleaming teeth, quivering nose
Swaggering brown bear

4 comments:

  1. I like these very much. My favourite is the bison haiku - that really paints a vivid picture for me.

    Thanks for the visit!

    Kat

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  2. Thank you! I took some advice and searched my haiku files for more traditional types (just to prove they're not all weird)

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  3. In the first one, I don't think you need "pond." "duck"puts us there. And you can't be in two places at once, which makes line 3 intellectual, rather than perceptual; an idea, rather than an experience

    foggy morning
    the duck's quack
    has no echo

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  4. What a difference the more practiced hand can make! I appreciate you sharing your wisdom. Thanks, Bill!

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